need help writing a song

ok im having a pool party in the summer and im planning a song 4 the invitation last years invitation looked liked this(sort of)

so when i make a funny invitiation me and my friend gonna perform a song so far it goes like this(sounds like califoria gurls by katy perry)

i know a place
where the girls r so much funner
its a party across the street
u might see some big hummers
sippin cold drinks
eating pizza and cupcakes(with friends)

the boys stare at us
cause they think that we look great(we do)
u can travel the world
but nothing is better than this party of the year
cause all of us are together
im so glad that youre all here

u r in-vi-ted to my pool party
cute swim suites
remember to cover up

thats all i got me and my friend need help u guys got any ideas

LOL!Nice

staraugust182 wrote:LOL!Nice

thx u think u can help me with more lyrics

hmm... I will PM you when I can think of lyrics barbie6, i think i have a bunch of ideas.

So what about this:

i know a place
where the girls r so much funner
its a party across the street
u might see some big hummers
sippin cold drinks
eating pizza and cupcakes(with friends)

the boys stare at us
cause they think that we look great(we do)
u can travel the world
but nothing is better than this party of the year
cause all of us are together
im so glad that youre all here

u r in-vi-ted to my pool party
cute swim suites
remember to cover up

It'll be so much fuuun Woahohoh
The party..!
The party..!
Come come come please come!
We will have nice and cold snacks!

staraugust182 wrote:So what about this:

i know a place
where the girls r so much funner
its a party across the street
u might see some big hummers
sippin cold drinks
eating pizza and cupcakes(with friends)

the boys stare at us
cause they think that we look great(we do)
u can travel the world
but nothing is better than this party of the year
cause all of us are together
im so glad that youre all here

u r in-vi-ted to my pool party
cute swim suites
remember to cover up

It'll be so much fuuun Woahohoh
The party..!
The party..!
Come come come please come!
We will have nice and cold snacks!

what if i reararange ur words and put the chorse like
u r in-vi-ted to my pool party
cute swim suites
remember to cover up

It'll be so much fuuun Woahohoh
u r in-vi-ted to my pool party
we will have nice and cold snack
please come over here or i will miss you
Woahohoho

sorry i know nothing of song writing but i think it's quiet good!

That's a super good idea. One year for a Halloween party I put invitations inside balloons
Do you still need any help with lyrics? I'd be glad to help if you still need it. ^^

CheerBear43 wrote:That's a super good idea. One year for a Halloween party I put invitations inside balloons
Do you still need any help with lyrics? I'd be glad to help if you still need it. ^^

yes i still need help verse one is finished and the chorse is to

barbie6 wrote:

CheerBear43 wrote:That's a super good idea. One year for a Halloween party I put invitations inside balloons
Do you still need any help with lyrics? I'd be glad to help if you still need it. ^^

yes i still need help verse one is finished and the chorse is to

The chorse?You mean the "Chorus" sorry lol

{Greetings, best friends
Let's go to a party…}

I, know a place
Where the girls are so much sweeter
It's a party, across the street
You might see some big hummers
Sippin', on cold drinks
Eating pizza and cupcakes (with friends)
The boys, stare at us
Because they think that we look great (we do)

You can travel the world
But nothing is better than this party of the year
'Cause all of us are together
I'm so glad that you're here

You are invited to my pool party
Cute swim suits, remember to cover up
Ice cold drinks, cupcakes, they're all you can eat
Woah, oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Everyone will be at my pool party
We will all have fun, I guarantee
Pizza, friends, tell me what could be better?
Woah oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Splashing in the pool
Be careful or you'll get hit
We tan, on the lawn
In our adorable swim suits

You can travel the world
But nothing is better than this party of the year
'Cause all of us are together
I'm so glad that you're here

You are invited to my pool party
Cute swim suits, remember to cover up
Ice cold drinks, cupcakes, they're all you can eat
Woah, oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Everyone will be at my pool party
We will all have fun, I guarantee
Pizza, friends, tell me what could be better?
Woah oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

You are invited to my pool party
Cute swim suits, remember to cover up
Ice cold drinks, cupcakes, they're all you can eat
Woah, oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Everyone will be at my pool party
We will all have fun, I guarantee
Pizza, friends, tell me what could be better?
Woah oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh


I didn't know whether or not you wanted the rap part, so I didn't write one. If you want to do the rap let me know and I can probably come up with something ^^

CheerBear43 wrote:{Greetings, best friends
Let's go to a party…}

I, know a place
Where the girls are so much sweeter
It's a party, across the street
You might see some big hummers
Sippin', on cold drinks
Eating pizza and cupcakes (with friends)
The boys, stare at us
Because they think that we look great (we do)

You can travel the world
But nothing is better than this party of the year
'Cause all of us are together
I'm so glad that you're here

You are invited to my pool party
Cute swim suits, remember to cover up
Ice cold drinks, cupcakes, they're all you can eat
Woah, oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Everyone will be at my pool party
We will all have fun, I guarantee
Pizza, friends, tell me what could be better?
Woah oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Splashing in the pool
Be careful or you'll get hit
We tan, on the lawn
In our adorable swim suits

You can travel the world
But nothing is better than this party of the year
'Cause all of us are together
I'm so glad that you're here

You are invited to my pool party
Cute swim suits, remember to cover up
Ice cold drinks, cupcakes, they're all you can eat
Woah, oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Everyone will be at my pool party
We will all have fun, I guarantee
Pizza, friends, tell me what could be better?
Woah oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

You are invited to my pool party
Cute swim suits, remember to cover up
Ice cold drinks, cupcakes, they're all you can eat
Woah, oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh

Everyone will be at my pool party
We will all have fun, I guarantee
Pizza, friends, tell me what could be better?
Woah oh, oh, oh, woah oh, oh, oh


I didn't know whether or not you wanted the rap part, so I didn't write one. If you want to do the rap let me know and I can probably come up with something ^^

i like it so does my friend we can think of the rap part thanks cheerbear and staraugust for helping us out

Glad you like it ^^
Have fun at your party~